Being a celebrity –such as a famous film star or sports personality- brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?
To become a
celebrity
every person requires to be the absolute best in their relevant field of work. The best performances attract people. People become followers of top performers. The performers
with Fix the agreement mistake
performer
highest
number of followers becomes a Change the article
the highest
celebrity
. Being a celebrity
has its own advantages and disadvantages but the benefits are high.
The downside of being a celebrity
is that it completely ends privacy
of life. The media and the fans keep following all the time and your every little movement is noticed carefully. The private life events are noticed and printed in the magazines through which the general public becomes aware of them. Another uncomfortable aspect of being a Correct article usage
the privacy
celebrity
is that it requires to be
cautious, not all information must be shared as it becomes exposed to Change the verb form
being
public
very fast.
Another drawback of being a Add an article
the public
celebrity
is that the followers, so called
fans, always demand Add a hyphen
so-called
for
top performance every time that the Remove the preposition
apply
celebrity
works. This
expectation of top performance creates a
pressure Correct article usage
apply
of being
consistent Change preposition
to be
at
delivering top results Change preposition
in
at
whatever Change preposition
in
celebrity
does. For example
, Imran Nazir was a promising Pakistani cricket who played very good cricket in
the beginning of his career but his good performance was not Change the preposition
at
consistant
which led to his suspension from the team.
Coming to the benefits of being a Correct your spelling
consistent
celebrity
, there are many. The respect and love that people give is immense and pure. The very feeling of knowing that your words and actions are carefully seen and followed by others gives you the pride of being so influential in society. There is no other honor
greater than Change the spelling
honour
this
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Your essay presents a clear opinion but can benefit from a more detailed introduction and a stronger conclusion. Extend the introduction to provide context and outline your main points clearly. End the essay with a summarizing conclusion that reinforces your opinion.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a logical structure, but transitions between paragraphs and ideas could be smoother. Use linking words and phrases to guide the reader through your arguments.
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Some points in your essay could be more thoroughly developed. Providing more specific examples or elaborating on your ideas would strengthen your arguments.
task achievement
Your essay addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of being a celebrity, presenting a balanced view.
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You have a clear structure in your essay, with distinct paragraphs addressing different aspects of the topic.
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