The graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compparisons where relevant.
The bar charts above
compares
the employment status of 60-64 Change the verb form
compare
years
old male
and Fix the agreement mistake
males
female
from 1970 to 2000 Fix the agreement mistake
females
amongst
4 countries, Belgium, the United Change preposition
in
State
, Japan and Australia.
It is clearly stated that Fix the agreement mistake
States
male
generally have Fix the agreement mistake
males
higher
employment rate than Correct article usage
a higher
female
. Fix the agreement mistake
females
Although
the number of old men
being hired dropped from 1970 to 2000, there was no significant change in the number of hired old women at the same time.
Across the countries, the number of employed men
with the age over 60 significantly dropped after 30 years
. Belgium suffered the greatest reduction from nearly 80% to under 20%. While
Australian employed men
halved from nearly 80% across the years
. Correct your spelling
Although
Alothough
USA and Japan Correct your spelling
Although
didnt
witness Correct your spelling
didn't
such
dramatic
decline, Correct article usage
a dramatic
USA
working Change noun form
USA's
men
also
reduced from over 70% to under 60% in 2000 and Japan
working Change preposition
in Japan
men
also
witnessed a noticeable drop from over 85% to over 70%
The women
employment status remains relatively stable across the two Change noun form
women's
years
. Belgium has the lowest hiring rate of under one-tenth across the years
, Australian women increased slightly from 16% to 18% in 2000. US
only showed a 3% increase from Correct article usage
The US
the
36% in 1970. Japanese suffered a small reduction of 3% from 43%.Correct article usage
apply
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