The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the
electricity
generation and usage across 10
countries
in 2014.
Overall
,
China
is the country with the heaviest
electricity
consumption and production, with the United
Stated
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coming very close in second. All
countries
have higher
electricity
generation than consumption except Germany.
Firstly
,
China
and
United
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the United
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States are the two
countries
wiht
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with
the highest
electricity
usage and production.
China
generated and used over 5000
billion
kWh
while
the United
State
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States
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produced and consumed around 4000
billion
kWh
.
On the other hand
, other
countries
only produced and used one-fourth of that of
China
. Russia synthesized and used around 1000
billion
kWh
. The rest of the
contries
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countries
only accounted for around 500
billion
kWh
to 700
billion
kWh
of
electricity
usage and generation. The only country with
deficit
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a deficit
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in
electricity
consumption is Germany, Germany produced around 530
billion
kWh
but consumed a staggering amount of 580
billion
kWh
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, countries, china, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • disparity
  • significant
  • top ten countries
  • main features
  • compare
  • relevant
  • geographical concentration
  • trends
  • patterns
  • implications
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