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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purpose in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purpose in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.
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The pie charts
give
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show
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 the proportion of
water
 utilised
in
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for
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 various purposes
such
 as industrial
use
, agricultural
use
, and domestic
use
 in six areas of the world - North
America
, South
America
, Europe, Africa, Central
Asia
, and South East
Asia
.
Overall
, 4 areas - South
America
, South East
Asia
, Central
Asia
, and Africa witness the highest amount of
water
 expenditure on agricultural
sectors
.
While
,
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apply
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 Europe and North
America
 spend the most
water
 on industrial
sectors
.
Furthermore
, all areas spend
least
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the least
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 on domestic
use
campare
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compare
compared
 to other
sectors
. It can
bee
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be
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 clearly seen that
,
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apply
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 North
America
,
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apply
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 and
Europes
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Europe
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use
water
on
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in
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 industry
approximately
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at approximately
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 53%, and
then
 around 39% is used in agriculture.
Further
, 13% of
water
 usage in North
America
, and 15% of
water
 in Europe
have
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is
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 used in domestic
sectors
. On the
othe
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other
 hand, South
America
, South East
Asia
, Africa, and Central
Asia
are
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significant
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significantly
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 used
water
on
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in
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agricultural
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the agricultural
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 sector, at 71%, 81%, 84%, and 88%, respectively.
While around
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Around
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 9% of
water
have
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is
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 used in
demestic
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the demestic
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sectosr
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sector
sectors
, and around 12%
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is use
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use
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used
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 in
industrial
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the industrial
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sectors
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, america, asia, sectors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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