The charts show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The charts show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The pie charts describe the proportion
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of unhealty
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unhealty
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unhealthy
food
in
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three different nutrients if it
are
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consumed too much. The most significant facts to emerge from the graph are that
dinner
has the highest portion in three types
nutrients
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of nutrients
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than others
while
breakfast
has the lowest percentage of all nutrition consumptions. Looking at the details,
dinner
and lunch are eating time which
have
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the biggest percentage of typical meals which consists of sodium at 43% and 29% and saturated fat at 37% and 26% respectively.
While
breakfast
and
snacks consumptions
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snack consumption
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are not as large as
than
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apply
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lunch and
dinner
portion
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portions
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. Where the number of sodium in
breakfast
and snacks are same about 14%.
On the other hand
, snacks
dominates
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dominate
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sugar nutrient Which achieves almost
a
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apply
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half and the second
high
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highest
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sugar consumption is
dinner
which
has
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is
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23%.
Meanwhile
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Meanwhile,
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breakfast
and lunch contain less sugar Just under 20% .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words dinner, breakfast with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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