The graph below shows the usage of oil in four different countries between 1966 and 2006 as a percentage of total energuy use within each nation.

The graph below shows the usage of oil in four different countries between 1966 and 2006 as a percentage of total energuy use within each nation.
The line graph shows the
oil
usage
in four different countries – Iceland,
Sweden
, Italy, and Turkey – as a percentage of total energy use from 1966 to 2006. One notable observation is that the proportion of
the
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oil
usage
in Iceland remained the highest throughout the entire
period
, accounting for around 90%. One exception was in 2006
,
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when Turkey surpassed it. At the beginning of
this
period
, Turkey was the lowest country whose percentage of
oil
usage
only
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recorded
60
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at 60
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%.
However
,
this
country started to skyrocket
from
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in
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1976 and had the highest percentage
at the end
of the
period
. It is
also
easy to notice that both
Sweden
and Italy
dewindled
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dwindled
sharply at the same time.
Sweden
, which had 80% of
oil
usage
in 1966 fell by half in 2006, and Italy even decreased from 70% in 1996 to 20% in 2006, falling by 3 times compared to the starting
period
.
Overall
, the line graph clearly shows that both Iceland and
Sweden
made up
of
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around 90%
regarding
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the proportion of
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oil
usage
,
while
Sweden
and Italy experienced
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abrupt decreases altogether between 1966 and 2006.
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