The tendency of human beings to copy one another is shown in the popularity of areas such as fashion and consumer goods. To what extent do you agree?

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are keen on being like

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watching these

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that these objects are so important and they have to be a copy of the

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copying some

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is new in

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that should buy it because it is new and

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them without any hesitation and there is just one reason

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it so another products are experience the same way in

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