The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan.

The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan.
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The two diagrams
compares
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the amount of people in Japan, from 1950 to 2055.
Overall
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, during
this
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one century
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period, in 2005 remained the biggest indicator with 127.8 million population, with all other
years
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spending much less on them. In 1950 was the lowest index with 84.1 million,
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after till 2005 the birth rate
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was increased
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,
however
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after, to 2055
dersease
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decreased
. population is 89.9 million. The gap between 1950 to 2015 in natality had widened and considerably more childbirth was in 2005 than in other
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. As can be seen from the second graph, the amount of adults
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more
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are
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or
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older or
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over 65
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getting bigger every year and to 2055
years
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who
aged
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are aged
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65
years
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compares
41.0
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%, in Japan would be the half of
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the country
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with old people.
Population
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The population
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did not stay on the same line and showed different indicators in all the time period but rose
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dramatically from 1950 to 1990. The period between 1950 and 2055 saw a sharp growth.
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