The line graph provides us with information about number of books that were rented from various libraries from june to september 2014 while the pie chart presents percentage of borrowed books' genre.

The line graph provides us with information about number of books that were rented from various libraries from june to september 2014 while the pie chart presents percentage of borrowed books' genre.
The line chart illustrates how many books were rented from different four libraries
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4 months in 2014.
Overall
, it can be seen that the popularity of all book markets increased over time, with the notable exception of Ryeslip. The number of books bought from West Eaton and Church Mount stood at the same level of 50 at the beginning of the period.
Subsequently
,
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library saw a significant rise of 30% in August and after that peaked at 150
at the end
of the time,
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equal number in September, despite past fluctuations. Regarding other libraries, Ryeslip was the most popular at the start, but witnessed a dramatic fall to just over 150 and lost 50% of customers.
In contrast
, the number of rented books went up in Sutton Wood, after
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drop by more
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50 per cent in August.
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