The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Honey
comes from Use synonyms
nectar
, which is a sweet liquid produced by flowers to attract pollinating insects. Use synonyms
Nectar
consists of 70 to 80 Use synonyms
percent
water with a mixture of three different sugars, namely sucrose, glucose and fructose. Change the spelling
per cent
Nectar
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also
contains several aroma chemicals to help attract Linking Words
bees
to the flowers
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Honey
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bees
suck and store Use synonyms
nectar
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Honey
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bees
suck Use synonyms
nectar
through their hollow proboscis and store it in the first chamber of their stomach.
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Honey
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bees
return to the nest. Use synonyms
Bees
can carry up to half their body weight in Use synonyms
nectar
Apart from Use synonyms
nectar
, Use synonyms
bees
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also
need pollen from plants as a source of protein and water for the needs of colony members
* The Linking Words
honey
harvest season is approximately three months and depends on the flower season. The longer the Use synonyms
honey
harvest interval, the older the Use synonyms
honey
produced. “The harvest depends on the flower season, usually three months apartUse synonyms
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