The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Honey
comes from nectar
, which is a sweet liquid produced by flowers to attract pollinating insects. Nectar
consists of 70 to 80 percent
water with a mixture of three different sugars, namely sucrose, glucose and fructose. Change the spelling
per cent
Nectar
also
contains several aroma chemicals to help attract bees
to the flowers
* Honey
bees
suck and store nectar
Honey
bees
suck nectar
through their hollow proboscis and store it in the first chamber of their stomach.
* Honey
bees
return to the nest. Bees
can carry up to half their body weight in nectar
Apart from nectar
, bees
also
need pollen from plants as a source of protein and water for the needs of colony members
* The honey
harvest season is approximately three months and depends on the flower season. The longer the honey
harvest interval, the older the honey
produced. “The harvest depends on the flower season, usually three months apartSubmitted by kelly on
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