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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the amount of several types of export
earning
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earnings
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 about one country between 2015 and 2016. The table displays the percentage of changes
of
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 different types of exports, compared to
2015and
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2015 and
 2016.
Overall
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, the
value
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 of petroleum
products
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 highest for two years. Next was engineered goods. They are much higher than the remaining three types. The values of petroleum
products
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, engineered goods, agricultural
products
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 and textiles have all increased from 2015 to 2016. Only the
value
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 of gems and jewellery has decreased. The export earnings
value
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 of Textiles was approximately
26billions
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26 billion
 in 2015. It had significantly increased to
31billions
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31 billion
 by 2016. It has grown by 15. 24%, it has the highest growth rate.
Next,
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is the Engineered goods.
This
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 category increased by 8. 5%, from
57billions
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57 billion
 to
62billions
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62 billion
, the
value
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 was always the second highest.
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, the
value
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 of petroleum
products
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 increased by 3%, from
61billions
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61 billion
 to
63billions
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63 billion
, the data was always the highest. Only the
value
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 of gems and jewellery decreased by 5. 18%, from 43billions to 41billions.
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agricultural
products
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 have hardly changed, only increased by 0. 81%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next, ".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words value, products, billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • economic sector
  • percentage change
  • increment
  • decrement
  • fluctuation
  • trend analysis
  • year-on-year comparison
  • significant growth/decline
  • stagnation
  • market dynamics
  • fiscal repercussions
  • trade balance
  • competitive advantage
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