The charts below show the percentage of the energy generate from different resources in a country in 1985 and 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the percentage of
energy
generated from various sources in the country for the years 1985 and 2003. These charts highlight the distribution of energy
production across five main resources.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that,
the productivity of oil and nuclear had decreased in two years .Remove the comma
apply
However
,other resources slightly increased except hydrogen which levelled off.
It is evident from the data that, the energy
generated by natural gas had been inclined by 10% meanwhile coal had grown half of it .Moreover
,the next resource was hydrogen which do
not Wrong verb form
did
seen
to have any activity during the period of time.
Moving Correct your spelling
seem
further
,the resource oil produced maximum energy
which had been
declined in 2003 by 13%. at the same time nuclear generated 22% of Unnecessary verb
apply
energy
in 1985, further
, it fell off by 5% in 2003 . in the end, there were few renewable resources who
changed their position by 3%.Correct pronoun usage
that
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