The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Age and Gender in USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. • You should write at least 150 words. • You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The bar chart depicts the incident of cardiac arrest
according to
their age
group and sex in the United States.
Overall
, men has
more heart attacks than Change the verb form
have
wemen
. The Correct your spelling
women
number
of cardiac arrest cases increases as they age
.
For man, the number
of patients suffering from heart attacks increased drastically from over 120 thousands
in 29-44 years old to a Change to singular
thousand
two-folded
increase to 424 Correct your spelling
two-fold
thousands
in 45-64 years old. Change to singular
thousand
Then
it rose slightly to exactly 440 thousands
for people aged above 65.
For women, the Change to singular
thousand
number
of heart attacks is significantly lower than that of men. only
3 thousand 29-44 Capitalize word
Only
female
suffered from the incident. Fix the agreement mistake
females
However
, it also
demonstrated a
uprising Change the article
an
treng
as they Correct your spelling
trend
age
. The number
increased to over 130 thousands
for Change to singular
thousand
age
group of 45-64 Add an article
the age
then
increased doublely
to 374 thousand for individuals aged 65 or above.Correct your spelling
doubly
double
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