The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Age and Gender in USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. • You should write at least 150 words. • You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below shows information about Heart Attacks by Age and Gender in USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

• You should write at least 150 words.

• You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The bar chart depicts the incident of cardiac arrest
according to
their
age
group and sex in the United States.
Overall
, men
has
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more heart attacks than
wemen
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women
. The
number
of cardiac arrest cases increases as they
age
. For man, the
number
of patients suffering from heart attacks increased drastically from over 120
thousands
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in 29-44 years old to a
two-folded
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increase to 424
thousands
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in 45-64 years old.
Then
it rose slightly to exactly 440
thousands
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for people aged above 65. For women, the
number
of heart attacks is significantly lower than that of men.
only
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3 thousand 29-44
female
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females
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suffered from the incident.
However
, it
also
demonstrated
a
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uprising
treng
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trend
as they
age
. The
number
increased to over 130
thousands
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for
age
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the age
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group of 45-64
then
increased
doublely
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doubly
double
to 374 thousand for individuals aged 65 or above.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, number, thousands with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 5 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • occurrence
  • prevalence
  • age group
  • gender disparities
  • notable trends
  • significant
  • comparison
  • discrepancies
  • patterns
  • statistics
  • demographics
  • rate of incidence
  • proportion
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