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The map displays the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The map displays the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given map illustrates the evolution of the Ryemouth village from 1995 to
present
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the present
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days
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day
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. In 29
year
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years
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, rural
area
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areas
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 completely changed. There was
residential
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a residential
the residential
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area
 on the
northwest west
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northwest-west
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side
 of the vill. On the northeast was located farmland and
forest
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a forest
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 park on the east
side
. Several shops and fish markets were located by the coast. The hotel and the cafe were placed by the east
side
 of
shore
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the shore
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. After 29 years, Farmland was demolished and
new
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a new
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 golf
area
 was set up there. Forest
park
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Park
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 which was located on the east
side
 of
township
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the township
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 was deforested and
tennis
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a tennis
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area
 was constructed
on
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in
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 that location. Shops and fish markets had big
change
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changes
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 too. Shops by the coast were converted into restaurants and fish markets turned
to
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into
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 apartments. The hotel and the cafe stayed the same, despite
new
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the new
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 car park which was set up on the east of the hotel.
In addition
, new houses were built
on
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in
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residential
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the residential
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area
, which is located
on
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apply
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northwest of the township.
Overall
, the village was changed dramatically.
Township
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The township
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 which
was
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used to be rural became more urban.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "set" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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