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The chart below gives information about population growth in three major Australian cities from 1992 to 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about population growth in three major Australian cities from 1992 to 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 line graph shows the change in amounts of people in the cities of Melbourne, Sydney, and Brisbane from 1992 to 2017. All cities saw a net increase in annual population
growth
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 by 2011, but the most dramatic increases happened between 2007 and 2010. In spite of
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overall
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 trend, there were a number of rises and falls in
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, with all cities showing a decrease in
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 in 2011.
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 it started out with the least annual
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, Melbourne’s
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 accelerated the most
overall
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, starting with only a roughly 23k increase in people in 1992, but gained around 110,000 people in 2017. Brisbane began with nearly as little
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 as Melbourne, but had lower net gain, rising from slightly over 23k
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 in 1992 to a gain of merely 50,000 by 2017. Sydney
initially
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 had the highest
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 rate at 30,000 in a y

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words growth with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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