Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, a
lot
of people
are moving to cities
from Correct article usage
the countrysides
countrysides
, Fix the agreement mistake
countryside
as a
result
the population in Add the comma(s)
result,
Correct article usage
the countrysides
countrysides
is falling down. The society split into two parts, one group of Fix the agreement mistake
countryside
people
thinks that this
has a positive impact, another
group thinks the opposite.
On the one hand, Correct word choice
and another
this
is a positive development for cities
, a large amount of workers are coming to work there it can evolve companies, institutions
. As for the Correct word choice
and institutions
countrysides
, a Fix the agreement mistake
countryside
lot
of space is free for summer houses,
or camps where Remove the comma
apply
people
from cities
can coma
and rest in Correct your spelling
come
the
nature. Correct article usage
apply
For instance
, in Israel
a Add a comma
Israel,
lot
of countrysides
are transformed to
entertainment camps or fields, where Change preposition
into
people
are coming
and Wrong verb form
come
having
fun, or coming Wrong verb form
have
for volunteering
in the fields.
On another hand, Change preposition
to volunteer
decreasing
population in rural Correct article usage
the decreasing
area
has a terrible influence. Fix the agreement mistake
areas
Besides
, animals are alone there and no-one
can regularly take care of the territory. As for the Correct your spelling
no one
cities
, a lot
of people
are coming. Overpopulation can interfere with development, also
human beings can face unemployment. For example
, the countryside which name is Shodnenskoe, the area is based near to
Moscow Change preposition
apply
misbecame
poor and unkempt, nature is dying there because Wrong verb form
has become
people
have leaved
Correct your spelling
left
this
place.
To conclude
, people
's immigration to the city can influence positive
and Change the word
positively
negative
Change the word
negatively
to
the countryside. In my opinion, Change preposition
apply
people
need
live in the place where they are needed, they can build Add the particle
need to
the
career in the countryside, they can develop Correct article usage
a
this
area and take care of it. As for me, moving from villages has a negative impact.Submitted by angelbonita6 on
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task achievement
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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introduction conclusion
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introduction conclusion
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Good use of specific examples to support the points made.
Your opinion
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