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The charts below show the proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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The pie charts illustrate the percentage of British
students
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 at a university in England who could converse in other languages
besides
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 English in two different years (2000 and 2010).
Overall
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, Spanish was the most used
language
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 in both years.
While
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 the
number
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 of
students
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 who could use two languages and German only was the lowest in 2000, in 2010, it was French, German and English only. In the case of the Spanish
language
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, 30% of the
students
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 in the university spoke
this
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language
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 in the first year, and it increased by 5% in the second year.
Likewise
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, the
number
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 of
students
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 who could speak two languages and another
language
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also
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 went up by 5%.
On the other hand
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, as for French only, it fell by 5% in the next year.
Similarly
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, when it comes to no other
language
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, there was a decline of 10% in the proportion of the
number
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 of
students
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 who could speak it.
However
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, in the German
language
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 only, the
number
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 remains the same in both years at 10%.
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