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The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six - art related subjects at a UK university in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six - art related subjects at a UK university in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The provided bar chart indicates the
number
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 of men and women who were
students
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 and studied six various majors related
art
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 topics in the United Kingdom
university
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 in 2011. It can be clearly seen that the highest
number
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 of female
students
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 tended to
study
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 English language and literature at the
UK
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university
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.
However
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,male
students
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 did not prefer to
study
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 Philosophy and It was the least
number
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 of male
students
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 in the United Kingdom
university
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 in 2011. In 2011,the proportion of female
students
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 who studied English language and literature was precisely 250 (which was the highest
number
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 of
students
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 over the period),just ahead of male
students
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 at nearly 240
students
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 with the same major at the
UK
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university
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.
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,just under 250 female learners were
into
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studying
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study
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 linguistics,Compared to male scholars at roughly 190
students
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 in England
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university
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universities
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 in 2011.
In contrast
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,studying Philosophy among women scholars was considerably
popular
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more popular
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 than studying
this
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 major among men at 150 and 50
students
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 in the
UK
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university
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 in 2011,respectively.
In addition
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,approximately 100 women learners preferred to
study
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 History and Archeology
in
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at
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the
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a
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UK
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university
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.
Whilst
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apply
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,the
number
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 of
men
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male
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 scholars who decided to
study
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 History and Archeology was
to
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apply
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around
of
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apply
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90 members in England
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university
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universities
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 in 2011.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, university, study, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • gender distribution
  • imbalance
  • participation
  • trend
  • highlight
  • significant
  • relatively balanced
  • disparity
  • societal factors
  • career opportunities
  • art-related subjects
  • analyze
  • compare and contrast
  • determine
  • discuss
  • cultural influences
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