The maps show changes in the local industrial village in England called Stamdorf between 1985 and 2015.

The maps show changes in the local industrial village in England called Stamdorf between 1985 and 2015.
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The map represents the Hawaiian island chain, it is located in the heart of the Pacific
Ocean
. As shown, it is formed of volcanoes and the active volcanoes are located at the south-east tip, where Hawaii is located. It
also
shows how the volcano eruption occurs. It is shown that the chain began to form almost 80 million years ago on the solid dense rock bed and each island started to evolve after an eruption on the seafloor. A hot spot existed on the
ocean
bed, which let out the material which is known as the
magma
.
Moreover
, the hot spot remained static.
Hence
,
magma
spume was formed and
this
magma
originated from as deep as 2,883 km below the
ocean
bed. Eruptions took place and a volcano was formed above the surface of the
ocean
. Later, the spume of
magma
has remained inactive as the Pacific tectonic plate moves in a north-west direction across it, at an annual speed of 7-9
centimetre
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. The other major islands in the Pacific
ocean
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Ocean
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are Niihau, Kauai, Oahu, Molokai, Maui, Lanai and Kahoolawe which are located
from
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0-100 kilometres away from each other.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ocean, magma with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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