The maps show changes in the local industrial village in England called Stamdorf between 1985 and 2015.

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The map represents the Hawaiian island chain, it is located in the heart of the Pacific

Ocean

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. As shown, it is formed of volcanoes and the active volcanoes are located at the south-east tip, where Hawaii is located. It

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shows how the volcano eruption occurs. It is shown that the chain began to form almost 80 million years ago on the solid dense rock bed and each island started to evolve after an eruption on the seafloor. A hot spot existed on the

ocean

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bed, which let out the material which is known as the

magma

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, the hot spot remained static.

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magma

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spume was formed and

this

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magma

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originated from as deep as 2,883 km below the

ocean

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bed. Eruptions took place and a volcano was formed above the surface of the

ocean

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. Later, the spume of

magma

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has remained inactive as the Pacific tectonic plate moves in a north-west direction across it, at an annual speed of 7-9

centimetre

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. The other major islands in the Pacific

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ocean

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Ocean

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are Niihau, Kauai, Oahu, Molokai, Maui, Lanai and Kahoolawe which are located

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0-100 kilometres away from each other.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words ocean, magma with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

190 words

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