The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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the total percentage of films and the ticket

sales

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from the year 1996 to 2006 . The first point to note is the significant rise in drama

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film

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released

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2006 more than

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. Moving on to the comedy

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are more interested in 2006

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film

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we can see the equal in romance

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released between 1996 and 2006.

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in the first place we can see

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in 1996 in drama and comedy

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sales

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way more than the others. But

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the ticket

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in 2006 is the highest.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, film, people with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

135 words

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depict
significant increases/decreases
highlighting
drawing comparisons
discrepancies
notable trends
unexpected findings
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phenomenon
emphasizing
evolution
implications
producers
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