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The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparison where necessary.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparison where necessary.
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The chart line illustrates the expenditure of two various countries on consumer goods in 2010.
Overall
, it can be pointed out from the chart that, the cars
was
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were
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 the
higest
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highest
while
 the perfume was the lowest of
two
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the two
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 countries on consumer goods in 2010. Both of the maximum and
minumum
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minimum
 items
were belong
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belonged
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 to the
UK
.
Cumputers
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Computers
 were
expenditured
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expenditure
expenditures
 about 350.000 in two different countries over the given period. But
france
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France
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 was
little
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a little
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 bit bigger than the
UK
 which is only 5%. It is
cleared
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clear
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 from the chart that cameras were different
number
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numbers
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of
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apply
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from
one-another
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one another
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. Cameras were 150.000 in France but in the
UK
 was above 350.000.
In addition
, the
UK
 expenditure on consumer goods
higher
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is higher
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 than France
most
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in most
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 of the categories.
However
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However,
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 parfume was
minimum
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minimal
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 in 2010. Three of the categories
they
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apply
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were closer to
one-another
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one another
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. They had
little
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a little
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 decline from
one-another
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one another
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 at that time.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • consumer goods
  • categories
  • compare
  • significant differences
  • trends
  • patterns
  • spending habits
  • similarities
  • findings
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