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The chart below shows percentages of males and females working for different duration(hours) per week in Australia in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows percentages of males and females working for different duration(hours) per week in Australia in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 report derives from the listed bar chart which enumerates the comparison of working
hours
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 of
men
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 and
women
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 per week in Australia in the time period of 2007. The unit of measurement is percentage. A glance at the chart reveals that
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the aggregate
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 proportion of males and females who worked 30-60 and 60-80
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 comprised considerably more values
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 mankind who worked 0-10, 10-20 and over 80
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 per week
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contained
 fewer metrics.
In addition
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, the category of people who worked over 80
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 recorded equal indicators.
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 with,
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 and
women
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 who worked long
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, explicitly, 30-60 in 2007 resulted in slightly fewer than 45% and a solid 35%, respectively. As regards 60-80
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 of working,
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 males and females consolidated in approximately 47% aggregately, a sharp 30% of
men
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 and marginally fewer than 20%. In stark contrast to the aforementioned, the group who devoted 0-10
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 to work consisted of a firm 5% of
men
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 and a vivid 15% of
women
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.
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 males recorded a measly more than 10% in 2007,
women
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 encompassed modestly more than 20%. Regarding remaining values, the group who worked over 80
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 counted a sharp 10% of both.

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