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The charts below the most popular films by genre for men and women and general ticket sales for different types of film in the USA in 2010.

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The bar
chart
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 compares
males
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 and
females
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 in terms of the proportion of their favourite
film
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 types, and
pie
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the pie
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chart
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 highlights the percentages of income from general
ticket
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tickets
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.
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,
action
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 movies were the most liked by
men
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,
whereas
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 women liked romantic
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comedy
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comedies
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 most. Meanwhile,
action
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 films generated the majority of income. Regarding the figure for
males
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' and
females
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' favourite genres of
film
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, 40% of
men
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 preferred
action
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 movies, making it the highest number in the
chart
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,
while
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 one in four women liked
this
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 genre.
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, Romantic
comedy
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 was the number-one type of
film
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 for
females
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 with 30%, which was 6 times as high as the proportion of
Men
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 who watched
such
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 genre. As regards the proportion of
comedy
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 and western, twice as many
males
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 and
females
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 enjoyed watching the former as the letter, at 20% and 10%
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accordingly
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respectively
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. Thriller was ranked third for
men
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 with 15%, 5% higher than that of the opposite gender,
whereas
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 the percentage of
males
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 liking science fiction was twice as high as that of
females
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 who liked the same type of
film
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.
According to
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 the pie
chart
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, almost half of
takings
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the takings
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 came from selling
ticket
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tickets
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 for
action
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 movies. Next came
comedy
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 with 24%, making it twice as high as the figure for romantic
comedy
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. The remaining 15% of income was generated by the sales of tickets for
thriller
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thrillers
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