Many people now undertake extreme activities, from hang-gliding to mountain climbing. Why do people risk their lives in this way, and do you think this is a good trend?

In today's world,
people
tend to be adventurous and want to involve themselves in extreme
activities
such
as hand gliding and mountain climbing.
This
essay will discuss the reason
to
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why
do
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people
risk
their
life
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lives
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by indulging in
such
activities
and
also
provide my opinion with profounding evidence.
Firstly
, many individuals
believes
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in one
life
. In that case, they take
this
quote "live
life
or leave
life
" very seriously.
This
quote resembles the
risk
that
people
take into consideration and can be a motivation for
pupil
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undertaking these dangerous
activities
.
For example
, many
people
are
under confident
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and fear taking
risk
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risks
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in
life
in
comparision
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comparison
with the
people
who are involved in these
activities
. These
activities
not only
gives
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a
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adernaline
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adrenaline
rush in the body but
also
helps
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help
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to boost their confidence in
life
.
This
is why
people
tend to opt for these
activities
.
Furthermore
,
this
tend
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has not only
help
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people
to overcome fear but
also
helps them in their
decision making
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decision-making
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.
For example
, many
people
has
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a
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stage fear and tend to lack their
decision making
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decision-making
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while
speaking in front of
public
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the public
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. In
such
cases,
people
tend to grow less.
In addition
, one study showed that
people
who are involved in
high
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risk
activities
are more confident in their
decision making
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decision-making
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in
comparision
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comparison
to
who
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those who
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do not.
To conclude
,
this
trend of taking part in extreme
activities
is a positive trend.
This
is because
,
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it helps in building skills
such
as
decision making
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decision-making
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while
being in public.
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grammar
Work on sentence structure and grammar to reduce errors. For example, 'hand gliding' should be 'hang-gliding', and 'to why do people' should be 'why people'.
examples
Ensure that all main points are well-supported with more specific examples. General statements without examples make arguments less convincing.
organization
Better organization will improve coherence and cohesion. Ensure each paragraph has one main idea, and use transition sentences effectively.
conclusion
Conclusion should reiterate the key points discussed in the main body to give a sense of closure and completeness.
content
Despite some grammatical errors, the essay presents a clear discussion on why people might engage in extreme activities.
conclusion
The concluding paragraph encapsulates the author’s viewpoint effectively, reinforcing the arguments made in the essay.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Adrenaline rush
  • Thrill-seeking
  • Personal growth
  • Accomplishment
  • Resilience
  • Risk management
  • Social recognition
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Endorphins
  • Fatality
  • Risk assessment
  • Cultural phenomenon
  • Recklessness
  • Safety precautions
  • Extreme sports
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