Nowadays many people have access to computers on a wide basis and a large number of children play computer games. What are the positive and negative impacts of playing computer games and what can be done to minimize the bad effects? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.
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the positive
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they
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make
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competition
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like Tekken,Counter strike
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games
, and they make a lot of profit when winning.
The negative one is, these games
are addictive and can make younger
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the younger
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parents
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their parents
children
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become stubborn as they only focus on games
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also
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outdoors
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children
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and not
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especially
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should have
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at home before having a
time to play Change the article
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computer
games
and it should be limited by parents
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