The table below shows the proportion of the workforce who are women and the proportion of managers who are women in five different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table above depicts the representative of
women
as the manpower and the managers
. There are five various countries.
In general, the representation of women
as
the Change preposition
in
workforce
in Egypt is the lowest and for the managers
is
Sri Lanka. On the other sides, Japan is the highest with Correct your spelling
in
women
as
the Change preposition
in
workforce
. Also
, America and Australia are hold
in the first place by Change the verb form
are held
are holding
women
as managers
.
First of all, the spare gap
between manpower and managers
in Australia is not that deep. It is only 1 per cent. Besides
, the participation of women
in Egypt in work
world is very low which is below 25 per cent, both of the Add an article
the work
workforce
and the managers
. In other words
, there is a big gap
compare
to other countries.
Change the form of the verb
compared
Then
, Sri Lanka is on
the third position in Change preposition
in
Correct article usage
the workforce's
workforce's
categorization and Change noun form
workforce
on
the Change preposition
in
last
rank in manager's
categorization. Correct article usage
the manager's
Move
to Japan, there is a profound Wrong verb form
Moving
gap
between percentation
Correct your spelling
presentation
in
the Change preposition
of
workforce
and the managers
. The managers
in Japan just
about 17 per cent by Add a missing verb
are just
woman
. Fix the agreement mistake
women
Last
country, same as Australia, the USA did not have a big gap
between the workforce
and the managers
.Submitted by wishmeluck on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, managers, workforce, gap with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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