A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your locality. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory establishment? Explain your position.

A corporate has announced their proposal to construct a new
factory
in our home town. Some suggest it will provide benefits by supplying job opportunities
while
others argue that it will contaminate locals by producing harmful substances. From my point of view, I support the construction of the new
factory
. On one hand, the environmental issue is the major drawback of
this
project. There is no doubt that the
factory
will produce exhaust and waste during production. The toxic substances will pollute air and water sources in the surroundings, which cause irreversible adverse effects on wildlife and humans.
Moreover
, the noise produced by the
factory
during production and construction may harass residents.
For instance
, several studies suggest
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soundwaves will induce aggressive behaviour when people interact with each other.
However
, those issues can be regulated by law and local council. The government can frequently inspect the waste and noise produced by
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to minimise the possibility of disturbing locals.
On the other hand
,
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can provide benefits to residents and the town by providing jobs and financial incomes.
Although
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heavily rely on remote machines for production goods, they still require mechanics to maintain and operate the machines.
Thus
introducing job opportunities to citizens near the
factory
.
Furthermore
, the enterprise is required to pay tax and license fees to
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to legally undergo business within a designated location. The additional financial support will allow the government to improve public services
such
as medical care and education. To summarise, the estimated economic growth produced by
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has outweighed the disadvantage of environmental concern. I strongly support the construction of a new company-owned facility in town.
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The essay addresses both the advantages and disadvantages of building a factory, but it can be better organised. Start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence to indicate what each paragraph will discuss.
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Some ideas need further development and specific examples to strengthen your argument. For instance, provide a real-life example of a factory benefiting a town economically.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion is brief and can be expanded to summarise key points discussed in the body paragraphs more comprehensively.
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Proofread the essay to correct minor grammatical errors and improve sentence structure. For example, the term "locals" should be replaced with "local residents" for better clarity.
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The essay shows an understanding of both sides of the argument, providing a balanced viewpoint before concluding with a personal stance.
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The conclusion effectively states the author's position on the issue.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • local economy
  • economic activity
  • employment opportunities
  • infrastructure
  • environmental impact
  • ecosystems
  • traffic congestion
  • property values
  • industrial aesthetic
  • rejuvenate
  • quality of life
  • pollution
  • wildlife habitats
  • suppliers
  • contractors
  • influx
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