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Te chars below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount oof time spent doing housework in househlo in one country between 1920 and 2019. summarise the information by selecting the relevant and main features and make comparisons where relevat.

#te #chars #show #changes #ownership #appliances #amount #oof #time #housework #househlo #country #summarise #information #features #comparisons #relevat
The line chart illustrates the percentage of
the
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households that had
an
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electrical
appliance’s
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, and
also
 depicts the average time spent
in
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doing housework in a week, in a particular country between 1920 and 2019.
Overall
, we observe that, since 1920, the number of houses with
an
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electrical
equipment's
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 has been increasing.
Conversely
, the amount of hours utilized for washing clothes, preparing meals, and cleaning has been dropping significantly.
In addition
 to
this
, the sales of
a
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Refrigerator
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Refrigerators
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 have increased drastically. On closer examination, we find that in 1920 almost none of the houses owned a fridge.
However
,
after
this
 period the demand was so high that by the start of
1980
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 every house owned
this
 appliance. In the beginning, the families that had a vacuum cleaner or a washing machine
was
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 40% and 30% respectively.
Moreover
, in 1960,
this
 figure was close to 60%, for both
the
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products. In 2000, Vacuum cleaners were seen to be present in almost every home. In 1920, out of 168 hours in a week 50 hours
was
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 used to do
housework’s
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houseworks
housework
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.
After
this
 interestingly, there has been a drop in
this
 figure.
As a result
, in 1960 it was 1200 minutes, and in 2019 it was exactly half of it.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure consistency in tense usage for better clarity.
coherence cohesion
Carefully proofread to avoid minor grammatical errors and typos.
task achievement
Expand on the explanation of how the presence of electrical appliances led to a reduction in housework hours.
task achievement
Provide more detailed comparisons to strengthen the analysis.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction clearly sets the stage for the data being analyzed.
supported main points
The essay provides relevant historical context and trends.
logical structure
Logical connection between the rise of electrical appliances and the reduction in housework hours.

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