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The table illustrates the cost of three environmental projects for sustainable forestry in the next five years. The pie chart, on the other hand, depicts four sectors allocated in the project in the first year.

The table illustrates the cost of three environmental projects for sustainable forestry in the next five years. The pie chart, on the other hand, depicts four sectors allocated in the project in the first year.
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The chart describes the funding of three forestry environmental projects over the next five years
while
 the pie chart gives information about the expenditure allocated for four sectors in the first
year
.
Overall
, the plan for West Africa and Central America experienced a considerable downward trend
while
the
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 Asia witnessed a remarkable upward trend over the next five years.
On the other hand
, the expenses of sectors in one
year
 contributed the most
on
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 salaries and
similar
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 percentage
on
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 training and office expenses
while
 second most contribution to set-up costs. In the first
year
, West Africa and Central America accounted for 10.5
million
 and 20
million
 respectively. After that, the trend gradually dropped in the following years and ended with 3.5
million
 in West Africa and 5
million
 in Central America in the fifth
year
.
In contrast
,
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 Asia
stand
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 out
30
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million
 at the beginning of the
year
 and
then
 decreased slightly to 20
million
 in the second
year
. Moving next
year
, it
then
 steadily progressed
as
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 40
million
 and continued to grow to about 50
million
at the end
 of
fifth
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year
. In contrary, the expenditure in the first
year
 notably shared in salaries around 50% and the second most proportion distributed to set-up costs.
Finally
, training and office expenses
divided
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 equally as 10% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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