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the bar chart given below shows the average rainfall for australia by month for last yeare. the line shows the average rainfall for australia by month for last 40 years. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

the bar chart given below shows the average rainfall for australia by month for last yeare. the line shows the average rainfall for australia by month for last 40 years. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The given bar chart demonstrates the monthly totals of average
rainfall
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 for Australia for
last
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year
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,
while
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 the line graph provides
average
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the average
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rainfall
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 total for
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last
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the last
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 40 years
Overall
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,we may see significant changes
of
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in
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rainfall
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 starting from
january
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January
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 and ending in
december
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December
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.Sometimes trends of
line
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the line
a line
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 are downwards,sometimes are upwards,and in some months
total
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the total
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 is quite high,in some months is much
low
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lower
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. Back to details,it is noticeable that the highest total for
last
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year
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in
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was in
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 January,with almost seventy mm,
as well as
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average
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the average
an average
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 total for
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last
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the last
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 40 years is highest at the beginning of
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year
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the year
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.Meanwhile, we have two
month
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months
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 with the lowest average
rainfall
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 for
last
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year
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,they are August and October with about 10 mm
that
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apply
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shorter than in January
in
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apply
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seven
time
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times
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,and the lowest average total for
last
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year
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 in the month
that is
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 between
two
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the two
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 lowest monthly
rainfall
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 total,September.And
in
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at
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 the end of
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year
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the year
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,we can notice increases as in
line
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the line
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 graph,as in
bar
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the bar
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 graph,but it almost halved in comparison with
beginning
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the beginning
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 of
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year
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the year
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. It is obvious,that the best period was during the first three
month
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months
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,after these three months there
is
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was
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 a
dramatical
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dramatic
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 decrease that lasted
untill
Correct your spelling
until
 September,and
then
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 it
has
Unnecessary verb
apply
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increased slightly.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rainfall, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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