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the bar chart given below shows the average rainfall for australia by month for last yeare. the line shows the average rainfall for australia by month for last 40 years. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

the bar chart given below shows the average rainfall for australia by month for last yeare. the line shows the average rainfall for australia by month for last 40 years. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The given bar chart demonstrates the monthly totals of average
rainfall
 for Australia for
last
year
,
while
 the line graph provides
average
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the average
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rainfall
 total for
last
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the last
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 40 years
Overall
,we may see significant changes
of
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in
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rainfall
 starting from
january
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January
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 and ending in
december
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December
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.Sometimes trends of
line
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the line
a line
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 are downwards,sometimes are upwards,and in some months
total
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the total
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 is quite high,in some months is much
low
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lower
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. Back to details,it is noticeable that the highest total for
last
year
in
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was in
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 January,with almost seventy mm,
as well as
average
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the average
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 total for
last
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the last
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 40 years is highest at the beginning of
year
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the year
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.Meanwhile, we have two
month
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months
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 with the lowest average
rainfall
 for
last
year
,they are August and October with about 10 mm
that
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apply
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shorter than in January
in
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apply
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seven
time
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times
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,and the lowest average total for
last
year
 in the month
that is
 between
two
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the two
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 lowest monthly
rainfall
 total,September.And
in
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at
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 the end of
year
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the year
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,we can notice increases as in
line
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the line
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 graph,as in
bar
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the bar
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 graph,but it almost halved in comparison with
beginning
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the beginning
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 of
year
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the year
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. It is obvious,that the best period was during the first three
month
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months
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,after these three months there
is
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was
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 a
dramatical
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dramatic
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 decrease that lasted
untill
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until
 September,and
then
 it
has
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apply
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increased slightly.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rainfall, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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