The graph below shows the daily consumption of three spreads per person from 1981 to 2007 in a country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the daily consumption of three spreads per person from 1981 to 2007 in a country.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graphs depict
margarine
, low fat & reduced spreads and
butter
as a daily spreads consumption between 1981 to 2007.
Overall
,
margarine
and
butter
suffered a downtrend,
whereas
low fat & reduced spreads experienced a noticeable growth but slightly dropped
in
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the end of
period
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. In the beginning, many individuals used
butter
as their spread,
started
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at 140
grams
in 1981. In 1986,
butter
had the highest consumption which peaked at 160
grams
daily.
However
,
butter
usage steadily plummeted
in
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1991 to 2007 from 100
grams
to just under 60
grams
respectively.
In contrast
, low fat & reduced spreads significantly increased from slightly under 20
grams
to 80
grams
in 1996 and 2001 respectively.
Then
, it experienced a marginal drop in 2007 which was over 60
grams
. Following that,
margarine
consumption
fall
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by approximately 20
grams
between the period of 1981 to 1986.
Margarine
experienced a level
off
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roughly 80
grams
to 100
grams
in
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between 1991 to 2001 before
suffered
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a notable
decreased
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to just 40
grams
in 2007.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words margarine, butter, grams with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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