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The table below gives information on average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daily activities. Write at least 150 words.

The table below gives information on average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on different daily activities. Write at least 150 words.
#information #hours #minutes #uk #males #females #activities
The chart illustrates the statistical data regarding the
time
 duration consumed by both ladies and gents in
UK
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the UK
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 for various
day to day
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day-to-day
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activities
.
Overall
,
while
maximum
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the maximum
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 amount of
time
 was utilized for sleep, the minimum
is
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was
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 dedicated
for
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to
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sport
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sports
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activities
 by both genders.
Moreover
,
it is clear that
 males play a key role in earning
activities
 when
female
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females
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balnce
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balance
 the households. When looking at the given data, it is conspicuous that more
time
 is used by
female
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females
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 to have a nap when compared to
the
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apply
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male
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males
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which
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who
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accounted
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account
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8.18
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for 8.18
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 hours and 8.04 hours respectively.
This
 was vice versa for the second largest
time consuming
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time-consuming
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 task, the leisure
activities
 for which males took 5 hours and 25
minutes
 per day and 27
minutes
lower
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less
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 than
it
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apply
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by
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apply
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female
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females
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.
Furthermore
, the
time
 allocated for
the
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apply
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most of
other
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the other
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 functions like ,resting, personal care, nutrition, hobbies like reading social life, voluntary work meetings and
traveling
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travelling
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, are all nearly the same for each other. In comparison, a significant variance is there in the means of sports and
children
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children's
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 care. Particularly, men spent two times more duration on playing than women who spent only 7
minutes
for
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on
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 it.
This
 was the opposite for
the
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apply
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child care
that
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apply
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when ladies had to spend 32
minutes
, only a half of that was dedicated by men.
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