The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relavent.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relavent.
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The graphs
illustartes
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illustrates
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the
percentage
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data for Australian's
people
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different habits
,
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apply
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when they
buying
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buy
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and
drinking
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drink
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coffee
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and tea. In six cities (
Sydney
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,
Melbrourne
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Melbourne
, Briban,
Aldelaide
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Adelaide
, and
Hobart
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).
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. most of the
people
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like to buy fresh
coffee
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,
while
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Adelaide
people
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like instant
coffee
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. And the lowest
percentage
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of
people
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went to a cafe for
coffee
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or tea. There was
a
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apply
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highest amount of
people
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bought
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who bought
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fresh
coffee
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in
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last
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the last
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4 weeks, were
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Hobart
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in Hobart
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, Melbourne,
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Sydney
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and Sydney
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( about 60% ) and only about55% in Brisban under 50 %. And the second high
percentage
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was for individuals who bought instant
coffee
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in
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last
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the last
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4 weeks,
Hobart
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was around 55%, and Brisban
about
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was about
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53%,
Aldelaide
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Adelaide
exactly
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was exactly
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50%, both Melbourne and
Sydney
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were under 50%. On
other
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the other
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hand
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hand,
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the
percentage
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of
people
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went
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who went
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to
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the cafe
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cafe
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cafes
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was less popular except in
Sydney
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and Melbourne about 40%,
while
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in the remaining cities
Hobart
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, Adelaide and Brisban ( just under 40% , and both about 30% respectively).
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, people, coffee, sydney, hobart with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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