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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relavent.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relavent.
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The graphs
illustartes
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illustrates
illustrate
 the
percentage
 data for Australian's
people
 different habits
,
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apply
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 when they
buying
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buy
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 and
drinking
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drink
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coffee
 and tea. In six cities (
Sydney
,
Melbrourne
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Melbourne
, Briban,
Aldelaide
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Adelaide
, and
Hobart
).
Overall
. most of the
people
 like to buy fresh
coffee
,
while
 Adelaide
people
 like instant
coffee
. And the lowest
percentage
 of
people
 went to a cafe for
coffee
 or tea. There was
a
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apply
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highest amount of
people
bought
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who bought
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 fresh
coffee
 in
last
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the last
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 4 weeks, were
Hobart
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in Hobart
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, Melbourne,
Sydney
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and Sydney
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 ( about 60% ) and only about55% in Brisban under 50 %. And the second high
percentage
 was for individuals who bought instant
coffee
 in
last
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the last
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 4 weeks,
Hobart
 was around 55%, and Brisban
about
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was about
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 53%,
Aldelaide
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Adelaide
exactly
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was exactly
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 50%, both Melbourne and
Sydney
 were under 50%. On
other
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the other
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hand
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hand,
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 the
percentage
 of
people
went
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who went
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 to
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the cafe
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cafe
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cafes
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 was less popular except in
Sydney
 and Melbourne about 40%,
while
 in the remaining cities
Hobart
 , Adelaide and Brisban ( just under 40% , and both about 30% respectively).
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