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You have recently travelled on a train and unfortunately left your luggage. Write a letter to the manager of the Lost and Found department of the railway regarding the luggage you accidentally left on the train. In your letter, give details of your train trip describe the luggage you left on the train say what actions you want him/her to take Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I writing
this
 letter to ask about the luggage that I accidentally left on the train when I was travelling from Toronto to Oakville Yesterday and the
bag
 is very important as my some documents inside. I was going to Oakville from Union Station to attend one of the events and during the journey, the
bag
 was with me, but when I left the train I forgot to take my
bag
 and lost it. It is a small cabin
bag
 which is blue in colour and has wheels,and aside chain and It is the brand VIP and the material is plastic. Because there are many vital papers inside and one of my laptops, It is important to me, so Kindly please suggest to me what action I should take to find my
bag
. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Faithfully, Ankit
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task achievement
Make sure to use complete sentences and check for grammatical accuracy to enhance clarity.
task achievement
Consider providing more specific details about your journey, such as the time of departure and arrival, to make your request more precise.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words to create smoother transitions between paragraphs and ideas.
coherence cohesion
Include a formal sign-off with a comma, for example: Yours faithfully,...
suitable writing tone
The tone of your letter is polite and appropriate for the context.
complete response
You have included a detailed description of your luggage, which is useful for identification purposes.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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