The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65
duing
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during
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100 years in three different countries. As over all that the Japan county increased
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the proportion of the population aged 65
percentage27
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%
duing
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over
6 years . On
one
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the one
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hand
the
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Japan in the
20 period
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20-period
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discreas
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decrease
increase
less
then
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5% percentage ,
while
USA and Sweden
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in
this
period. On the other
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hands
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there was no change between 1960 to 1980 in
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Japan
whereas
USA and
Sweden
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rise
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marked proportion of the population aged 65 to
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15%.
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USA
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20 years between
2000to
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2000 and
2020 state
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was stable
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no change to the 14 percentages
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aging population
  • proportion
  • elderly
  • significant increase
  • surpass
  • gradual increase
  • crucial period
  • rapid increase
  • healthcare advancements
  • lower birth rates
  • projections
  • adjustments in social services
  • demographic dynamics
  • lifestyle choices
  • trends
  • notable
  • potentially
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