In many countries today insufficient respect is shown to older people. What do you think may be the reasons for this? What problems might this cause in society?

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people are showing respect for
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, good ethics should be tote in schools or
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future. The reasons and consequences will be analysed in
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. First of all, in many old cultures respect is an important principle, induvisules
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to forget about it.
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for many reasons, the main reason would be dispensing with the elderly in all areas and them
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their children about good ethics.
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no empty seats on the bus and
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old man came in, no one would give up their seat for him, thinking
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are more deserving of it . Moving to the
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of sympathy and understanding,
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. Growing up knowing no one will look after them . All in all, the case of not appreciating old folks should be looked after.
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future and people be more polite and understanding.
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Task Response
Your introduction presents the topic but could be clearer in stating your opinion or the main points you will discuss. For a higher score, try to articulate a more specific thesis statement.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on the organization of your essay to improve logical structure. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea and transitions smoothly to the next. For example, your first paragraph could better delineate the specific reasons for the lack of respect.
Coherence and Cohesion
Some sentences are awkward or unclear. For instance, "the main reason would be dispensing with the elderly in all areas" can be simplified to "the main reason is that older people are often marginalized in many areas." Additionally, "Addsionly" and "behaveir" are misspelled. Improving grammar and vocabulary will enhance clarity.
Task Response
Your essay addresses the task by identifying reasons for insufficient respect toward the elderly and discussing potential problems arising from this behavior.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, providing a basic structure to your essay.
Task Response
You provide some relevant specific examples, like the one about giving up a seat on the bus, which helps illustrate your points.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social structures
  • nuclear families
  • extended family
  • intergenerational respect
  • dual-income households
  • technological advancements
  • perception
  • value shifts
  • vigor
  • innovation
  • increased mobility
  • neglected
  • mental health
  • generational divide
  • misunderstandings
  • stereotypes
  • social fabric
  • healthcare strain
  • inadequate care
  • quality of life
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