The chart below shows the result of a survey of patients who stayed in three different wards of a hospital . It shows what percentage of the patients replied ' very good ' about various aspects of their hospital experience . Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant . Write at least 150 words .

The chart below shows the result of a survey of patients who stayed in three different wards of a hospital . It shows what percentage of the patients replied ' very good ' about various aspects of their hospital experience .

 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make 

 comparisons where relevant .

 Write at least 150 words .
This
chart shows the reason
of
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for
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some
patients
who stayed in three different wards of a hospital and what percentage of the
patients
replied "very good" about various aspects of their hospital
experiene
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experience
. In Holly
Ward
,
patients
always notice hospital
staff
.Approximately 90% of it held positive views because of the hospital
staff
,
quality
of
treatment
and aftercare,significantly higher than those in the other wards.
Wating
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Waiting
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time,
although
it is the least portation,it still has
a
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an
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important station,more than 70%
prople
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people
will
thinking
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think
be thinking
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about
this
. In Maple
Ward
,most
patients
will think about
quality
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the quality
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of
treatment.
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treatment
80%.The
quality
of aftercare
an
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and
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hospital
staff
share the same account,about 70% each one.The
least
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last
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one in Maple
Ward
is the waiting time,only 50%
patients
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of patients
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will think about that. Oak
Ward
followed a similar pattern,but with smaller percentages,with 80%of
patients
expressing high satisfaction with the
quality
of
treatment
,around 70%for
staff
and aftercare,and just above 50%for waiting time. In general,
both
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apply
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patients
in Holly
Ward
,Maple
ward
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Ward
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and OakWard will concentrate
the
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on the
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quality
of
treatment
.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words patients, ward, staff, quality, treatment with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.

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