Task2 The movements of people from the villages to the cities for work has caused a lots of problems in both places. What are the serious problems associated with this? What measures can be taken to solve these problems?

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Over the
last
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few years,population relocation to urban
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in favour of finding jobs has become one of the main problems that
people
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should pay attention
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In
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essay
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I will discuss the major reasons behind
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issue and viable
solution
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solutions
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. On the one hand, the reason for travelling to the
cities
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for work seems to be
queite
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quite
simple, the first driving offices built in larger developed
areas
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.
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because
people
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generally choose to find a place
for
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work in
cities
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because of
shortage
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the shortage
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of
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jobs in the village.Another important reason
of
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this
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issue
can be
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that
,
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when
young
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the young
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generation
leave
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their families in the rural
areas
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to excel in big
cities
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it creates additional risks for older individuals.
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, many senior citizens stay their home lonely, without their children. They lose necessary support and
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additional pressure on
healthcare
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the healthcare
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system.
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,despite the fact that the migration from rural
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to
cities
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has gained momentum is
serious
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a serious
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problem there are some reliable
solution
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to it. The first viable solution to
this
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problem is
that
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increase the number of factories and companies in rural
areas
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and help
people
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improve their living conditions by providing them with work.
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, the more opportunities are provided in the villages the less amount of
people
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who come from the
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countryside
will be.Another significant way by which
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problem can be tackled is that local authorities should support the growth of tourist attractions in the village.The main reason for
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fast-growing tourists can drive the local economy and expand the labour market to meet tourist demand. In a nutshell,
government
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the government
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should increase job scope and allure
people
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to travel to a town,in
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situation
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situation,
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the authority's action plays a crucial role
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in addressing
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this difficulties
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Migration
  • Urbanization
  • Rural-urban divide
  • Dwindling opportunities
  • Socio-economic disparities
  • Infrastructure development
  • Job creation
  • Sustainable development
  • Economic diversification
  • Skills training
  • Cultural assimilation
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