Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opionion.
Some
people
think when someone is visiting a country
, they should obey local traditions and behaviour. On the other hand
, the country
itself that
must adapt Correct pronoun usage
apply
with
Change preposition
to
their
Correct pronoun usage
its
visitors
culture and accept differentiation. Personally, I am on the first opinion. It is important to have respect Change to a genitive case
visitor's
visitors'
to
the heritage and local Change preposition
for
people
.
Before people
are travelling
to one Wrong verb form
travel
country
, they should looking
for as Change the verb form
look
be looking
many
as possible Correct quantifier usage
much
the
Correct article usage
apply
informations
about the Change the wording
information
pieces of information
country
that they want to visit. The informations
can contain Change the wording
information
pieces of information
such
as local customs, the ancestors, the holy place, etc. Because by getting the informations
, the tourists will know what they can Change the wording
information
pieces of information
do
and can not do when they are going to the Unnecessary verb
apply
country
. In addition
, they will easily get permission from local people
because they follow the local instructions. To illustrate, the
visitors can have Correct article usage
apply
until
zero chance to enter the local area if they do not obey the Change preposition
apply
tradition
rules.
On the other sides, it is a wrong mindset if some Replace the word
traditional
people
think a tourist do
not need to adjust to the local culture. In Change the verb form
does
this
case, if the
Correct article usage
apply
people
want to enjoy their vacation in a country
, they have to know their limit
. Fix the agreement mistake
limits
For instance
, Balinese people
argue their place have
been Correct subject-verb agreement
has
destructed
by tourist behaviour because they are trespassingVerb problem
destroyed
a
temple Change preposition
on a
at
there. Not only thatChange preposition
apply
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
riding a motorcycle without a driving license. Therefore
, this
is one of the impacts if the tourists do not want to fulfill
local Change the spelling
fulfil
people
's want
.
Fix the agreement mistake
wants
To sum up
, it is essential for the
visitors to Correct article usage
apply
give
respect and appreciate local Verb problem
apply
people
by obey
their rules. Because if it is not like that, the local Change the verb form
obeying
people
can feel bothered. Still, I highly recommend for
Change preposition
apply
the
tourists Correct your spelling
that
to
do Fix the infinitive
apply
this
instead
think the host country
that
should adapt.Correct pronoun usage
apply
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