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The chart below gives information about the most common sports played in New Zealand in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below gives information about the most common sports played in New Zealand in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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This
 bar chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 a variety of
sports
 popularity
degree
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degrees
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 of
diffirent
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different
 gender
playd
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played
 in New
zealand
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Zealand
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 in 2002.
Overall
,
boys
 and
grils
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girls
 have
significant
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significantly
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 different interests in the types of
sports
 they play. The most popular
sports
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sport
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in
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among
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grils
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girls
 is
netball
,
then
 followed by
the
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apply
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swimming is in
the
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a
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 higher proportion than other kinds of
sports
. The highest
percentag
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percentage
 of
boys
 choose to play soccer,
whereas
 they
shows
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show
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a
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apply
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little
interests
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interest
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 in
neball
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netball
.
According to
 the data,
grils
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girls
 show
deeply
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deep
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interests
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interest
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 in
the
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apply
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netball
 in over
the
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apply
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one fourth
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one-fourth
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.
On the other hand
, there is a
little
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small
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 number of
boys
spend
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who spend
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 time in
the
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apply
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netball
 in almost
noun
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every noun
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. A large number of
boys
 prefer to play soccer
that
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which
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 is
in
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with
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 the highest
percentsge
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percentage
in
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apply
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almost 25%. Swimming
also
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is also
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the
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apply
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popular
in
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among
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grils
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girls
, but the proportion is
lowe
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lower
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 than
netball
in
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at
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 around 23%. The other is in the same situation across the
boys
, it is in the significant proportion in the whole
sports
 types. And
grils
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girls
 hardly ever to chose
the
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cricket.
Baketball
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Basketball
 and tennis are in the nearly percentage in both
gender
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genders
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 from 5% to 10%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sports, boys, grils, netball with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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