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Money offered for post graduate research is limited; as a consequence, some people argue that financial support from the government should only be provided for scientific research rather than research for less useful subjects. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that funds for
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 graduate
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 are limited:
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, some individuals say that
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government
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 investments should be only in scientific
reseaches
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researches
research
more
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 than other
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research
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.
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 essay agrees with that statement because if the
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focus
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 on scientific
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,
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 will improve
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 level , and later on
these researches
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 will develop their lives.
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government
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 investments
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 sciences are essential to improve
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education's
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quality
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. because when
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researches
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done
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, the
government
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 can use all of them to improve their
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 undergraduate students take it to study.
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, scientific
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 like
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 in biology ,
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will make individuals understand
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 body and find a solution for any problem,
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 they can use it in
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 lectures.
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. a recent study found that the rate of science
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 papers increased and many countries had
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 it to improve their educations. Another point to consider is
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 financial
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 provided for post
garduate
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graduate
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 by the
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 has a huge
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in
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 their lives
,
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 because when
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 levels and sciences improve, their lives'
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 will improve as well.
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, in developing
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 they did not care about funds
scientific
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researches
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 so their live's
quality
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 dropped and they suffered
with
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 diseases. For
that
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 it is important to
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scientist
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 financial In conclusion, scientific
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 is the key for any
countries
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 to develop fast, and
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 will improve both
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education
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of education
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quality
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. It is recommended that the
government
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 has to increase their
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on
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for
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 sciences.
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grammar
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