The movements of people from the villages to the cities for work has caused a lots of problems in both places. What are the serious problems associated with this? What measures can be taken to solve these problems?

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few years migration of
people
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urban
for
work
has caused a
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of problems in
both
places.
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to resolve the same. On the one hand
migration
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of
people
from the
countryside
to the
urbans
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urban
for
work
has caused a
lots
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in
both
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behind
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there is air pollution in cities.
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cars and factories so there
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air pollution.
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despite the fact that migration of
people
from the
countryside
to the
urbans
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urban
for
work
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lots
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of problems in
both
places are
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problem
. There are some reliable solutions to it. The first viable
solution
to
this
problem
is that the
solution
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this
situation is
problem
is that the
solution
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this
situation is government should support a wide range of job opportunities,
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supporting
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can increase opportunities for expanding communities.
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problem
that is
creating many negative effects. It can be addressed with the
solution
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been mentioned in the previous paragraphs from my personal point of view in order to tackle
this
problem
is to increase the number of factories and companies in
countryside
areas and help
people
improve their living conditions by providing them with
work
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Migration
  • Urbanization
  • Rural-urban divide
  • Dwindling opportunities
  • Socio-economic disparities
  • Infrastructure development
  • Job creation
  • Sustainable development
  • Economic diversification
  • Skills training
  • Cultural assimilation
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