You recently had your computer fixed at a local computer store, however, you are not pleased with the service you received. Write a letter to the store manager. In the letter:  describe the situation  explain why you are dissatisfied  say what you want the manager to do Write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the service that I fixed at a local computer store. Let me introduce myself first I am a proper client of your store. A week ago I purchased a computer fixed from your store. Everything was great but your servant extremely
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down work it is exceedingly bad. I believe that I don't deserve a quality of service like
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issue myself by talking with your staff.
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it took me a lot of time. I kindly suggest you
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take serious action on
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the matter properly and I look forward to hearing precious reply soon. Yours faithfully, Sevinch Barotova
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task achievement
Expand on the situation and the issues you faced in order to provide a clearer and more complete response. This will strengthen your task achievement.
coherence cohesion
Refine your sentence structure for better coherence. For example, 'I believe that I don't deserve a quality of service like this' could be rephrased to 'I believe I do not deserve such poor quality service'.
coherence cohesion
Be mindful of grammatical accuracy, particularly verb forms and tenses, to improve the clarity and professionalism of your letter.
greeting and closing
Your greeting and closing are appropriate and respectful, which is important for a formal letter.
single idea per paragraph
You have organized your letter into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a single idea, which aids readability.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • repair
  • technician
  • malfunctioning
  • reevaluation
  • refund
  • unsatisfactory service
  • frequently crashing
  • performance improvement
  • charged for new parts
  • initially promised
  • lengthy repair time
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