The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eating too much. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eating too much.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the percentages in three
type
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types
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of nutrients namely sodium, saturated fat and added sugars that can
been
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seen in our usual meals. As we can see, during dinner, most people enjoyed salty foods with 43% rates,
whereas
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the others
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others
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two components
not
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less than 23% in
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.
However
, when it comes to snack time, many
prefered
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preferred
sweet foods with a number of 42%,
following
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by whole number with 35% in both other nutritions. Next is breakfast, similar digits can be seen in added sugars and oily cooks with 16% but higher
unit
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than sodium intakes.
In contrast
,
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atrium
chemical is added
while
having lunch marked 29% compared to fat and sugar, 26% and 19%, respectively.
Overall
, those three
kind
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of nutrients are unhealthy to a person's health if continued to consume daily which will lead to
disease
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diseases
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such
obesity
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as obesity
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and heart illness.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average percentage
  • nutrients
  • sodium
  • saturated fat
  • added sugars
  • typical meals
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • snacks
  • consumption
  • excess
  • health implications
  • comparison
  • trend
  • pattern
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