The charts below show the percentage of male and female workers in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of male and female workers in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided circle graph illustrates the amount of
both
male and female
workers
in two countries
wich
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which
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are named
county
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County
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A and
country
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Country
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B .
Overall
, for
workers
of
both
genders
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genders,
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it is clear that
a rising amount of them are in services in
both
countries but for agriculture and industry they differ depending on the
country
.
Noticably
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Noticeably
services
has
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have
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taken a great
amount
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number
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of
workers
in
both
places as about 65% to 49% are in it . As for
country
a
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A
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agriculture is the second most
commen
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common
choice
espeacially
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especially
for females but for
country
b only a couple of males
particpate
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participate
we can say the same for female
workers
.
However
, for
workers
in
country
b
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b,
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many of them are in industry as 32% of men are in it and 11% for women .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words both, workers, country with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • gender employment rate
  • workforce
  • disparity
  • employment trend
  • notable difference
  • counterpart
  • demographic
  • labor market
  • sector
  • predominantly
  • employment rate
  • analysis
  • comparative study
  • statistical data
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