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The charts below show the percentage of male and female workers in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of male and female workers in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided circle graph illustrates the amount of
both
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 male and female
workers
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 in two countries
wich
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which
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 are named
county
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County
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 A and
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country
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Country
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 B .
Overall
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 , for
workers
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 of
both
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genders
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genders,
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it is clear that
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 a rising amount of them are in services in
both
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 countries but for agriculture and industry they differ depending on the
country
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 .
Noticably
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Noticeably
 services
has
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have
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 taken a great
amount
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number
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 of
workers
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 in
both
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 places as about 65% to 49% are in it . As for
country
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a
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A
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 agriculture is the second most
commen
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common
 choice
espeacially
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especially
 for females but for
country
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 b only a couple of males
particpate
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participate
 we can say the same for female
workers
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 .
However
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, for
workers
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 in
country
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b
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b,
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many of them are in industry as 32% of men are in it and 11% for women .

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words both, workers, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • gender employment rate
  • workforce
  • disparity
  • employment trend
  • notable difference
  • counterpart
  • demographic
  • labor market
  • sector
  • predominantly
  • employment rate
  • analysis
  • comparative study
  • statistical data
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