Some people think that because of email and telephone, communication among people is less personal now than it used to be. Do you agree or disagree with that view? Use specific reason and example to explain to your answers.
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phones
and emails rather than communicating in person . Do you agree with that ? In my opinion, I agree with Use synonyms
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why I believe that .
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communication
in person is getting less . At first , the phone's popularity Use synonyms
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phones
and that could lead to addiction , depression and isolation , all these examples make people feel that Use synonyms
communication
in person is hard .
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social media is the main factor in making Correct article usage
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communication
through the internet more used . Use synonyms
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celebrity doesn't communicate personally very often so they just follow them . The truth is their celebrities don't post Change the spelling
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personal
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their personal
life
but they believe what they just see .
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unfortunately,
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task achievement
While your essay addresses the topic, it would be beneficial to further elaborate on your arguments and provide clearer and more detailed examples. This will help in reinforcing your viewpoints.
coherence cohesion
Try to link your sentences and paragraphs more smoothly. Using transition words like 'therefore', 'as a result', and 'furthermore' can help make your essay more cohesive.
coherence cohesion
Consider structuring your essay by clearly separating the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Each body paragraph should ideally discuss one main idea supported by relevant examples.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in presenting your main point of view.
task achievement
You have made a good attempt to provide examples to support your points. With a bit more detail, these examples can effectively reinforce your arguments.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.