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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Group or team activities can teach more important skills for life than those activities which are done alone. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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There is no denying the fact that activities are crucial to the health of people.
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 it will encourage each other each
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 to do it alone because when you join with
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depends on the exercise if it is difficult
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The essay should have a clearer and more explicit thesis statement to guide the reader. Try to articulate clearly whether you agree or disagree with the topic.
coherence cohesion
Consider structuring the essay more logically, perhaps by stating your main points in the introduction and then elaborating on them in separate paragraphs. This will improve the coherence.
task achievement
Your arguments in favor of group and individual activities can be better developed with more comprehensive reasons and more specific examples. This will enhance the depth of your response.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each idea is given its own paragraph, and use transition words to help guide the reader through your essay. This will improve coherence and cohesion.
general
Work on sentence construction and grammar to improve clarity. This includes subject-verb agreement and proper use of prepositions.
task achievement
You touched on both sides of the argument, which shows a balanced perspective. This is a good foundation for a well-rounded essay.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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