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The graph shows the percentage of women working in 6 countries in 1960, 1970 and 1980. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting on th e main features and make comparisons where relevant

The graph shows the percentage of women working in 6 countries in 1960, 1970 and 1980. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting on th e main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The chart illustrates the
number
 of women who went into higher education level in the
years
 1970 and 2005 for the five states. The units of measurement
was
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were
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 given in percentages.
Overall
, the figure witnessed an upward turn in both
years
 though it was not a significant increase.
Also
, an equal
number
 was seen in a certain country.
Firstly
, Canada had the highest
number
 of women which was 60% in both 1970 and 2005 and it happened that it was
also
 similar for the given two
years
.
On the other hand
, Japan in the year 1970 had 20% but in 2005 the figure doubled to 40 per cent. For the Germany and
USA
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USA,
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 the percentages rose
up with
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by
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 a small margin from 40% to 55% in
USA
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the USA
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 and 50% to 55% for Germany respectively in the
years
 1970 and 2005.
However
, in
UK
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the UK
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 the
number
 of learners increased
with
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by
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 more than
a
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apply
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half from 35% in 1970 to 60 per cent in 2005.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment rate
  • percentage
  • decade
  • increase/decrease
  • compare/contrast
  • significant
  • socio-economic factors
  • progressive
  • minimal changes
  • hypothesize
  • global developments
  • regional developments
  • influence
  • trend analysis
  • workforce participation
  • historical context
  • labor market
  • gender gap
  • employment policies
  • cultural norms
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