The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of residents’ coffee and tea purchasing and consuming habits in last 4 weeks in five different cities (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart) in Australia.

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The provided graph compares the proportions of consuming

coffee

among Australians in five cities;Sydney, Melbourne,Brisbane,Adelaide, and Hobart during the past four weeks. Looking from an

overall

perspective,

it is clear that

the majority of citizens

prevered

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preferred

to go to

cafe

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a cafe

the cafe

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, meanwhile, the least consumption was of fresh

coffee

According to

the bar chart, the city of Melbourne consumed about 43%of fresh

coffee

and 49%of instant

coffee

while

, the total percentage of going to

cafe

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cafes

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reashed

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reached

the

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peak

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approximatly

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approximately

64%. At the same time, Hobart and

Sydney

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Sydney's

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city presented

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apply

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closer results to Melbourne, regarding the given information the residents of both

citites

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cities

took nearly 63% ,and 62% respectively.

On the contrary

, Brisbane and Adelaide showed

a similar rates

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similar rates

a similar rate

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of buying fresh

coffee

nearly 35%.

Additionally

, when it comes to

buy

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buying

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instant

coffee

Brisbane people bought about 54% which is

consiodered

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considered

as higher than Adelaide's rate by 5%.

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Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

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