The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of residents’ coffee and tea purchasing and consuming habits in last 4 weeks in five different cities (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart) in Australia.

The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of residents’ coffee and tea purchasing and consuming habits in last 4 weeks in five different cities (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart) in Australia.
The provided graph compares the proportions of consuming
coffee
among Australians in five cities;Sydney, Melbourne,Brisbane,Adelaide, and Hobart during the past four weeks. Looking from an
overall
perspective,
it is clear that
the majority of citizens
prevered
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preferred
to go to
cafe
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a cafe
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, meanwhile, the least consumption was of fresh
coffee
According to
the bar chart, the city of Melbourne consumed about 43%of fresh
coffee
and 49%of instant
coffee
,
while
, the total percentage of going to
cafe
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cafes
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reashed
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reached
the
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a
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peak
by
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of
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approximatly
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approximately
64%. At the same time, Hobart and
Sydney
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city presented
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closer results to Melbourne, regarding the given information the residents of both
citites
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cities
took nearly 63% ,and 62% respectively.
On the contrary
, Brisbane and Adelaide showed
a similar rates
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similar rates
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of buying fresh
coffee
nearly 35%.
Additionally
, when it comes to
buy
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instant
coffee
Brisbane people bought about 54% which is
consiodered
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considered
as higher than Adelaide's rate by 5%.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • residents
  • habits
  • purchasing
  • consuming
  • illustrates
  • comparison
  • preferences
  • trend
  • frequency
  • café culture
  • observations
  • urban lifestyle
  • fresh coffee
  • instant coffee
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