The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of residents’ coffee and tea purchasing and consuming habits in last 4 weeks in five different cities (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart) in Australia.

The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of residents’ coffee and tea purchasing and consuming habits in last 4 weeks in five different cities (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart) in Australia.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of
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Australian
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residents on buying and drinking habits in
last
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the last
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four weeks in five different cities namely Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart. As we can see, most of the locals enjoyed having
coffee
or tea in the cafe
while
relaxing and
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the views with no less than 48% each.
Not to mention
,
in
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Melbourne city marked the higher number with 64% rates.
In contrast
, individuals in all five cities have minimal favourites towards fresh
coffee
especially in Brisbane and Adelaide with similar digits in 34%.
Last
but not least,
the
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instant
coffee
as
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is
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the second
choices
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. Mostly preferred it because of
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the convenient
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convenient
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and cost-saving that can be seen above.
However
, in Adelaide city, slightly higher compared to
dine in
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coffee
or tea with 49% and 48%, respectively.
Overall
, the people in Oceania country love to drink
coffee
and tea in the cafe shops rather than the packaging ones.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • residents
  • habits
  • purchasing
  • consuming
  • illustrates
  • comparison
  • preferences
  • trend
  • frequency
  • café culture
  • observations
  • urban lifestyle
  • fresh coffee
  • instant coffee
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